Works In Progress

Working Plan

12-2-16

From the feedback of my peers, my initial draft needs a lot of work. I had little time to work on the draft, so this did not come as a shock. In general, I need to be more specific and expand on my ideas. The introduction is too brief and does not make an argument about the outcomes from this class. The introduction does not have a thesis, implied or otherwise, so I need to add one.

Looking forward, I need to spend at least one hour a day for the next week working on the reflective portfolio. Then, after my first final, I can devote three whole days to completing and improving the portfolio. The portfolio is the culmination of process and thus must use all of the steps in the writing process. I will outline each artifact page first. Then write the introduction after the artifacts are completed.

Draft of Introduction

12-1-16

Looking back on my semester in English 1101, I have made a lot of progress. I have learned how to utilize multimodality and use evidence to support my arguments. My artifacts exemplify my learning throughout the semester and the progress I have made as a first year student.

Quotation Sandwich

11-28-16

Being able to think critically about a text is an essential skill when analyzing a text. For my Values of Science Project, I analyzed every aspect of two texts and the implicit or explicit value of each text. The NASA Climate website was more difficult to analyze because its value was implied not stated. To determine the value, I had to think critically about not only what their value was, but also why they elected to imply the value rather than state it explicitly. Below, I have a quote from my project website summarizing what I determined through critical thinking and analysis.

“A website is also able to directly address acknowledgement; however, NASA elected to only present the facts in a way that implied acknowledgement of global warming was not high enough. Extenuating circumstances prevented NASA from directly addressing acknowledgement of global warming (specifically: Government Funding).”

Though critical thinking, I deduced that NASA is a government funded agency that would not want to lose its funding. Many of the people that determine NASA’s yearly budget may not agree that global warming is real and NASA, therefore, cannot explicitly state that global warming is real. If NASA stated that explicitly on a government website, the government officials that determine the yearly budget might decrease the budget to a staggeringly low amount. I added the parentheses at the end of the quote because my project was not about how NASA’s budget is determined but how they imply the value of acknowledgement through their climate website.

Blog Post Revision

11-2-16

Original:

For TIME magazine, Eros Hoagland created a photo essay where he attempted to portray Google as a place to work the way you work best. The first picture in the slide show, Be Yourself, perfectly exemplifies the freedom Google provides to their employees. The slide shows a Google employee surrounded by clusters of objects that presumably supply creativity and a sense of belonging. Not only does this slide show that Google wants their employees to be comfortable in their work environment, but also that there can be order in disorder. The employee’s workspace severely needs to be cleaned; however, the employee appears to be familiar with his environment. I would be willing to bet he knows everything that is in his workspace and exactly where it is located. More subtly, by stating in the description that Google provides a laid-back environment, Hoagload is portraying Google as an easy place to work. Forbes writer Karsten Strauss recently did an article called “How To Keep Employees Happy (And To Just Plain Keep Them)” where Strauss gave examples of how certain companies keep their employees happy. Strauss had this to say about Google

“Google, whose hiring protocol has been lauded as one of quirkiest and most challenging for prospective employees, has been known to offer luxurious benefits to those that make it through the company’s HR gauntlet. The company has been known to offer such perks as free, on-site haircuts; gyms with swim-in-place swimming pools (complete with lifeguards on duty); R&R tools like ping pong, foosball, billiards and video games; laundry and dry-cleaning facilities; on-site medical staff and, of course, the famous massages. Google gave employees 100,000 hours in subsidized massages in 2012.”

With perks like those who wouldn’t want to work at Google? Besides those amenities, Google will not stress out their employees with computer problems. In the second slide, Hoagland shows the company computer help desk where designated employees can repair your computer onsite. In two photos, Hoagland managed to paint Google as a stress-free work environment that every company should strive to emulate and left me with only one question. Is Google hiring Chemical Engineers?

Revision:

Is Google the most amazing place to work? Eros Hoagland sure thought so when he created a photo essay where he portrayed Google as a workplace for the people and by the people for TIME magazine. The first picture in the slide show, Be Yourself, perfectly exemplifies the freedom Google provides to their employees. The slide shows a Google employee surrounded by clusters of objects that presumably supply creativity and a sense of belonging. Not only does this slide show that Google wants their employees to be comfortable in their work environment, but also that there can be order in disorder. The employee’s workspace desperately needs to be organized; however, the employee appears to be familiar and comfortable with his environment. I would be willing to bet he knows everything that is in his workspace and exactly where it is located. More subtly, by stating in the description that Google provides a laid-back environment, Hoagload is portraying Google as an easy place to work. Forbes writer Karsten Strauss recently did an article called “How To Keep Employees Happy (And To Just Plain Keep Them)” where Strauss gave examples of how certain companies keep their employees happy. Strauss complemented Google when she said:

“Google, whose hiring protocol has been lauded as one of quirkiest and most challenging for prospective employees, has been known to offer luxurious benefits to those that make it through the company’s HR gauntlet. The company has been known to offer such perks as free, on-site haircuts; gyms with swim-in-place swimming pools (complete with lifeguards on duty); R&R tools like ping pong, foosball, billiards and video games; laundry and dry-cleaning facilities; on-site medical staff and, of course, the famous massages. Google gave employees 100,000 hours in subsidized massages in 2012.”

With perks like those who wouldn’t want to work at Google? Strauss began the quote with a simple negative statement about Google, their rigorous interview processes and questions, but then listed all of the benefits of working at Google. The combination of a simple negative followed by many complex positives persuades her readers that Google truly is an amazing place to work. Who wouldn’t want to work for a company that offers dry-cleaning, on-site haircuts, and subsidized massages. Not only is Google a leading company when it comes to search engines and mobile operating systems, but they are also one of the most profitable software companies in Silicon Valley. Besides those amenities, Google will not stress out their employees with computer problems. In the second slide, Hoagland shows the company computer help desk where designated employees can repair your computer onsite. In two photos, Hoagland managed to paint Google as a stress-free work environment that every company should strive to emulate and left me with only one question. Is Google hiring Chemical Engineers?

Curious

10-28-16

Kim Todd

Kim Todd’s “Curious” makes the argument that human curiosity is an overpowering desire within all humans. We cannot resist the urge to learn more about even the most disgusting of topics. “When elements previously thought of as incompatible are harnessed together-a juxtaposition-the curiosity grows stronger.” Todd says this to show that human curiosity grows linearly as the peculiarity of the subject increases. I understand this quote to mean that I will be more interested in a topic the less likely I am to find elements of that topic together according to Todd. I would be extremely curious about something if I saw an object with wings, a screwdriver for a head, and human feet to walk.

Emily Graslie

Emily Graslie is the Chief Curiosity Correspondent at the Field Museum in Chicago. Graslie argues about the relevance of items not on display at the Field Museum. She explains the history of some of the coolest artifacts in their collection that most people never even see. Graslie said, “We can’t be curious about something if we don’t know it exists.” She points to the example that most people walk past the carbon nanodiamonds that are the oldest known objects in our solar system to see the opal jemstone. It is not that the people do not care about the nanodiamond, they simply do not know they exist and therefore are not curious about them.

 

Transforming Science

Why does it matter?

Our project changes the way that people view, receive, and interpret the information provided by the Georgia Tech News article. Our argument changes the received understanding that only Georgia Tech students can bring solar power to Haiti. Our argument has real-world consequences that change the publics view on who can volunteer. By broadening the audience, more people will see that projects like ours exist and they can volunteer to help with these projects.

Comparison of Two Articles

9-21-16

The two articles use vastly different lengths. Popular Science is a much shorter article that focuses more on the images and gifs than the text itself. Popular Science wants their views to see what is happening throughout the page as apposed to watching a video at the beginning then reading the whole article. The Georgia Tech article focused mainly on the challenges of designing the experiment, the technical aspects of the experiment, and the insight gained from this experiment. The audiences are extremely different. The Georgia Tech article is aimed at an intellectual crowd that might be interested in continuing the research set forth in this article. The popular Science article is geared for persons with an interest in science that do not necessarily want to participate in the research. Popular Science attempts to bring the public into the light of science so that they may become more fascinated by science but not necessarily alter their life.

Spinning Science Peer Reflection

9-16-16

Peer Project Grade

Rhetorical Analysis: Mature

Stance: Mature

Development of Ideas: Mature

Organization: Mature

Conventions: Competent

Design for Medium: Mature

My conclusion was mostly filled with irrelevant statements that need to be more focused and on task. I am very repetitive throughout the paper making it redundant. I need to use actual rhetorical terms when writing a rhetorical analysis essay.

In the future I will attempt to be more concise. I will proofread specifically for repeated ideas and attempt to combine them as well as I can. I will build my conclusion writing skills so that my conclusions will become relevant to the paper as a whole. For this paper specifically, I will reflect on the comments made by my peers and revise accordingly. I could potentially rewrite the conclusion drawing from my introduction and body paragraphs to make a resounding final statement.

Spinning Science

9-11-16

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              Scientific claims in advertising can cause many problems. L’OREAL Paris was sued for advertising that their product could alter the genetic code of the consumer’s that used it to a more desirable code. Using science in an advertisement makes the consumer feel safer purchasing the product. Products backed by research are inherently better than products that were not researched at all. Companies are definitely aware of the consumer’s mindset, so they put “scientific” claims into their advertisements. “Studies have shown our product whitens teeth 2 shades,” sounds better than “Our products whitens teeth 2 shades.” Playing on society’s fears of bad products, companies make their product seem more reliable by making scientific claims. Neutrogena, as a brand, makes the claim of being “#1 Dermatologist Recommended.” Most of their products, besides being “#1 Dermatologist Recommended,” also have their own scientific claims. The ability of a company to manipulate consumers by using science in their advertisements blatantly utilizes rhetoric to target certain audiences, situations, and emotions.

Common First Week Video Reflection

8-29-16 

  1. Describe your process. What steps did you find most effective? Least?
  2. What part of your project are you most satisfied with and why?
  3. If you could redo any part of your process and/ or final product, what would you change? Why?

The first and most important step in my process was writing the script. I find it difficult to come up with ideas in the moment so having a perfect script to read from was essential. After writing the first draft, I took a break to go to lunch so that I could reflect on what I had written and new ideas could come forth. After lunch I edited and revised the script to make sure it was in my voice. The script would have been hard to read if it said something I am not used to saying. Finally, I had to record and edit the actual video. I decided to do the video in three separate parts so I would not have to talk as long and if I messed up I would not have to redo the entire video. Steps after making the video included: making a Vimeo account, uploading the video to Vimeo, and submitting the link and script to T-square. Going to lunch was an extremely effective step as it allowed me to clear my head and rethink everything I had just typed. The least effective step was editing the video because I had to download and use software I had no experience using.

I am most satisfied with the setting of my video. I was not sure where I would be able to record myself speaking and put a lot of time into thinking about where I would sit. I finally decided on the lounge on my floor because it had a plain white wall with one picture hanging so it would not distract the viewers from what I had to say.

If I could redo any part of the process, I would change how I recorded the video. Recording it in three segments made it easier for me, but the video is worse because of it. It is easy to tell that there are three segments because of my poor editing skills and this makes the video seem choppy and takes away from what I said in the video.

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